You wanted me to write you a critique for this one. As I tell everyone, don't mind the star-ratings, they aren't informative at all.
Photographically: I think I understand what you are trying to do here. When you're looking around you sometimes you get a feeling that here is something worth captuing. When you get this feeling there is something there and you should think a little about what it is that caught your attention. So try capturing this scene in different angles. The reason you want to do this is because you'll very often be surprised how much difference angles has on the same subject. Also when photographing in lowlight conditions you very often will need help by some lightsource to pinpoint the focus in the right direction. Using a flashlight of some sort to light up the subject you want to focus on will help you alot. I think when you look at this image you feel that you didn't nail the focus you wanted(?).
Post-processing: As you see your sky is somewhat blown out. Using a gradient to darken the top half will leave my eyes comfortable on the bottom half where it's happening something. Also adding some overall sharpness to the image is also recommended. I encourage you to try out the smart sharpen-filter in photoshop, just be sure that you don't overdo it, you can also use opacity within the same layer to reduce the sharpening if it's too much.